2012大学英语四级写作技巧——语态的隐含意义(一)(2)

英语四级写作技巧:语态的隐含意义(1)

  这种表达的问题在于:

  (1) 简单的“主语+谓语”结构太多;

  (2) "written"和"writer", "The Art of Strategy"和" It","set of principles"和" they"为重复用语;

  (3) 读起来很单调。

  After:In his fifty-six-hundred word classic, The Art of Strategy, Sun Tzu put forth a tightly compressed set of principles for achieving triumph over opposition.

  介词结构+同位语+主语+谓语的形式比较好,因为将"Sun Tzu" 放到了最重要成分-主语的位置,其他成分按逻辑排序居次要地位。整个句子很流畅。