第八讲
写好段落的三个标准
首先，一个段落必须有一个中心即主题思想，该中心由主题句特别是其中的题旨来表达。整
个段落必须 紧扣这个主题(stick or hold to the topic)，这就是段落的统一性(unity)。
其次，一个段落必须有若 干推展句，使主题思想得到充分展开，从而给读者一个完整的感
觉，这就是完整性(completeness or adequateness)。再者，一个段落不是杂乱无章的，而
是有机的组合，句子的排列顺序必须合乎逻 辑，从一个句子到另一个句子的过渡必须流畅
(smooth)，这就是连贯性(coherence)。下面我们就对这三个标准分别加以说明。
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1. 统一性
一个段落内的各个句子必须从属于一个中心，任何游离于中心思想之外的句子都是不可取
的。请看下例：
Joe and I decided to take the long trip we'd always wanted across the country. We
were like young kids buying our camper and stocking it with all the necessities of
life. Bella bakes the best rhubarb pie. We started out in early spring from
Minneapolis and headed west across the northern part of the country. We both enjoyed
those people we met at the trailer park. Joe received a watch at his retirement dinner.
To our surprise, we found that we liked the warm southern regions very much, and
so we decided to stay here in New Mexico.
本段的主题句是段首句，controlling idea（中心思想）是 take the long trip across the
country。文中出现两个 irrelevant sentences，一个是 Bella bakes the best rhubarb pie，
这 一段是讲的是 Joe and I ，中间出现一个 Bella 是不合适的。还有，Joe received a watch
at his retirement dinner 这一句更是与主题句不相关。考生在四级统考的作文卷上常常
因为造出 irrelevant sentences（不相关语句）而丢分，值得引起注意。再看一个例子：
My name is Roseanne, and I like to keep physically fit. I used to weigh two hundred
pounds, but I joined the YMCA for an exercise class and diet program. In one year
I lost eighty pounds. I feel much better and never want to have that much weight
on my five-feet frame again. I bought two new suitcases last week. Everyday I practice
jogging three miles, swimming fifteen laps, lifting twenty-pound weights and playing
tennis for one hour. My mother was a premature baby.
本段的 controlling idea 是 like to deep physically fit，但段中有两个 irrelevant
sentences，一个是 I bought two new suitcases last week，另一个是 My mother was a
premature baby。
从上面两个例子可以看出，native speakers 同样会造出来 irrelevant sentences。卷面
上如 果这种句子多了，造成偏题或离题，那问题就更严重了。
2． 完整性
正象我们前面说得那样，一个段落的主题思想靠推展句来实现，如果只有主题句而没有推
展句来进一步交待和充实，就不能构成一个完整的段落。同样，虽然有推展句，但主题思想
没有得到相对圆满的 交待，给读者一种意犹未尽的感觉。这样的段落也不能完成其交际功
能。例如：
Physical work can be a useful form of therapy for a mind in turmoil. Work
concentrates your thoughts on a concrete task. Besides, it is more useful to work
---- you produce something rather than more anxiety or depression.
本段的主题句是段首句。本段的两个推展句均不能回答主题句中提出的问题。什么是＂a
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mind in turmoil＂（心境不平静）Physical work 又如何能改变这种情况？为什么它能起
therapy 的作用？读 者得不到明确的答案。
由于四级统考的作文部分只要求写一篇 100～120 个词的三段式短文，每一段只有大约 40
个词左右，因此，要达到完整就必须尽可能地简明。例如：
It is not always true that a good picture is worth a thousand words. Often writing
is much clearer than a picture. It is sometimes difficult to figure out what a picture
means, but a careful writer can almost always explain it.
段首句所表达的主题思想是一种看法，必须有具体事例加以验证。上述两个推展句只是在
文字上对主题作些解释，整个段落内容空洞，简而不明。如果用一两个具体的例子的话，就
可以把主题解释清楚 了。比如下段：
It is not always true that a picture is worth a thousand words. Sometimes, pictures
are pretty useless things. If you can't swim and fall in the river and start gulping
water, will you be better off to hold up a picture of yourself drowning, or start
screaming "Help"?
3．连贯性(coherence)
连贯性包括意连和形连两个方面，前者指的是内在的逻辑性，后者指的是使用转换词语。
当然这两者常常是不可分割的。只有形连而没有意连，句子之间就没有内在的有机的联系；
反之，只有意连而没 有形连，有时行文就不够流畅。
1） 意连
段落中句子的排列应遵循一定的次序，不能想到什么就写什么。如果在下笔之前没有构思，
边写边想，写写停停，那就写不出一气呵成的好文章来。下面介绍几种常见的排列方式。
A．按时间先后排列(chronological arrangement)
We had a number of close calls that day. When we rose, it was obviously late and
we had to hurry so as not to miss breakfast; we knew the dining room staff was strict
about closing at nine o'clock. Then, when we had been driving in the desert for nearly
two hours ----- it must have been close to noon ---- the heat nearly hid us in; the
radiator boiled over and we had to use most of our drinking water to cool it down.
By the time we reached the mountain, it was four o'clock and we were exhausted. Here,
judgement ran out of us and we started the tough climb to the summit, not realizing
that darkness came suddenly in the desert. Sure enough, by six we were struggling
and Andrew very nearly went down a steep cliff, dragging Mohammed and me along with
him. By nine, when the wind howled across the flat ledge of the summit, we knew as
we shivered together for warmth that it had not been our lucky day.
本段从 ＂rose＂（起床）写起，然后是吃早餐(＂not to miss breakfast＂, ＂closing at
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nine o'clock＂)，然后是 ＂close to noon＂，一直写到这一天结束(＂By nine--")。
B. 按位置远近排列(spatial arrangement)。例如：
From a distance, it looked like a skinny tube, but as we got closer, we could see
it flesh out before our eyes. It was tubular, all right, but fatter than we could
see from far away. Furthermore, we were also astonished to notice that the building
was really in two parts: a pagoda sitting on top of a tubular one-story structure.
Standing ten feet away, we could marvel at how much of the pagoda was made up of
glass windows. Almost everything under the wonderful Chinese roof was made of glass,
unlike the tube that it was sitting on, which only had four. Inside, the tube was
gloomy, because of the lack of light. Then a steep, narrow staircase took us up inside
the pagoda and the light changed dramatically. All those windows let in a flood of
sunshine and we could see out for miles across the flat land.
本段的写法是由远及近，从远处(＂from a distance＂)写起，然后＂get closer＂，再到
(＂ ten feet away＂)，最后是 ＂inside the pagoda＂??当然，按位置远近来写不等于
都是由远及近。根据需要，也可以由近及远，由表及里等等。
C. 按逻辑关系排列(logical arrangement)
a. 按重要性顺序排列(arrangement in order of importance)
If you work as a soda jerker, you will, of course, not need much skill in expressing
yourself to be effective. If you work on a machine, your ability to express yourself
will be of little importance. But as soon as you move one step up from the bottom,
your effectiveness depends on your ability to reach others through the spoken or
the written word. And the further away your job is from manual work, the larger the
organization of which you are an employee, the more important it will be that you
know how to convey your thoughts in writing or speaking. In the very large business
organization, whether it is the government, the large corporation, or the Army, this
ability to express oneself is perhaps the most important of all the skills a man
can possess.
这一段谈的是表达能力，它的重要性与职业，身份有关，从＂not need much skill"或 "of
little importance"到 "more important"，最后是 "most important"。
b.由一般到特殊排列（general-to-specific arrangement）
If a reader is lost, it is generally because the writer has not been careful enough
to keep him on the path. This carelessness can take any number of forms. Perhaps
a sentence is so excessively cluttered that the reader, hacking his way through the
verbiage, simply doesn't know what it means. Perhaps a sentence has been so shoddily
constructed that the reader could read it in any of several ways. Perhaps the writer
has switched tenses, or has switched pronouns in mid-sentence, so the reader loses
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track of when the action took place or who is talking. Perhaps sentence B is not
logical sequel to sentence A ---- the writer, in whose head the connection is clear,
has not bothered to provide the missing link. Perhaps the writer has used an important
word incorrectly by not taking the trouble to look it up. He may think that "sanguine"
and "sanguinary" mean the same thing, but the difference is a bloody big one. The
reader can only infer what the writer is trying to imply.
这一段谈的是 a writer's carelessness，先给出一个 general statement 作为主题句，
然后通 过 5 个 ＂perhaps＂加以例证。
c. 由特殊到一般排列(specific-to-general arrangement)
I do not understand why people confuse my Siamese cat, Prissy, with the one I had
several years ago, Henry. The two cats are only alike in breed. Prissy, a quiet,
feminine feline, loves me dearly but not possessively. She likes to keep her distance
from people, exert her independence and is never so rude as to beg, lick, or sniff
unceremoniously. Her usual posture is sitting upright, eyes closed, perfectly still.
Prissy is a very proper cat. Henry, on the other hand, loved me dearly but
possessively. He was my shadow from morning till night. He expected me to constantly
entertain him. Henry never cared who saw him do anything, whether it was decorous
or not, and he usually offended my friends in some way. The cat made himself quite
comfortable, on the top of the television, across stranger's feet or laps, in beds,
drawers, sacks, closets, or nooks. The difference between them is imperceptible to
strangers.
本段的主题句是段首句，它仅提出一个问题：为什么两只猫会被搞混。然后对两者进行比
较，末句才下结论。
2） 形连
行文的逻辑性常常要靠适当的转换词语及其他手段来实现。请读下面这一段文字并找出文
中用以承上启下的词语：
Walter's goal in life was to become a successful surgeon. First, though, he had
to get through high school, so he concentrated all his efforts on his studies ---
in particular, biology, chemistry, and math. Because he worked constantly on these
subjects, Walter became proficient in them; however, Walter forgot that he needed
to master other subjects besides those he had chosen. As a result, during his junior
year of high school, Walter failed both English and Latin. Consequently, he had to
repeat these subjects and he was almost unable to graduate on schedule. Finally,
on June 6, Walter achieved the first step toward realizing his goal.
本文中起承上启下的词语有两种，一种是转换词语(transitional words or phrases)，另
一种 是起转换作用的其他连接手段(linking devices)。前者依次有：first, though, so,
in particular, and, because, however, besides, as a result, both?and, consequently,
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and, finally.后 者依次是：he, he, his, his, he, these, them, he, those, his, he,
these, his. 本段中共有词汇 105 个，所使用的转换词语及其他连接用语共 26 个词，约占
该段总词汇量的四分之一。由此可见，掌 握好 transitions 不仅对行文的流畅(smoothness)
有益，而且对于学生在半个小时内写足四级短文所要求的 120 个词也是不无好处的。
一个段落里如果没有 transitions 也就很难有 coherence 了.我们看下面一个例
子： Speaking and writing are different in many ways. Speech depends on sounds.
Writing uses written symbols. Speech developed about 500 000 years ago. Written
language is a recent development. It was invented only about six thousand years ago.
Speech is usually informal. The word choice of writing is often relatively formal.
Pronunciation and accent often tell where the speaker is from. Pronunciation and
accent are ignored in writing. A standard diction and spelling system prevails in
the written language of most countries. Speech relies on gesture, loudness, and rise
and fall of the voice. Writing lacks gesture, loudness and the rise and fall of the
voice. Careful speakers and writers are aware of the differences.
本段中除了第 6 句开头出现一个起过渡作用的＂it＂之外，没有使用其他的过渡词语.这
样，文中出现许多重复的词语，全段读起来也显得生硬而不自然。如果加上必要的过渡词语
来修饰的话，这一段就 成了下面一个流畅连贯的段落：
Speaking and writing are different in many ways. Speech depends on sounds; writing,
on the other hand, uses written symbols. Speech was developed about 500 000 years
ago, but written language is a recent development, invented only about six thousand
years ago. Speech is usually informal, while the word choice of writing, by contrast,
is often relatively formal. Although pronunciation and accent often tell where the
speaker is from, they are ignored in wiring because a standard diction and spelling
system prevails in most countries. Speech relies on gesture, loudness, and the rise
and fall of the voice, but writing lacks these features. Careful speakers and writers
are aware of the differences．
4． 有损连贯性的几种情况：
考生在写作中经常出现下面几种错误：
1）不必要的改变时态，比如：
In the movie, Robert Redford was a spy. He goes to his office where he found everybody
dead. Other spies wanted to kill him, so he takes refuge with Julie Christie. At
her house, he had waited for the heat to die down, but they come after him anyway.
2）不必要的改变单复数，比如：
Everybody looks for satisfaction in his life. They want to be happy. But if he seeks
only pleasure in the short run, the person will soon run out of pleasure and life
will catch up to him. They need to pursue the deeper pleasure of satisfaction in
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work and in relationships.
3）不必要的改变人称，比如：
Now more than ever, parents need to be in touch with their children's activities
because modern life has the tendency to cause cleavages in the family. You need to
arrange family like
it so that family members will do things together and know one another. You need
to give up isolated pleasures of your own and realize that parents have a set of
obligations to sponsor togetherness and therefore sponsor knowledge.
因此写作中，一定要注意时态，人称以及数的变化是否正确，要注意保持一致。
